My Visual Poem is about Rock music, and a metaphorical blues musician in a depression, and his music that's the only thing keeping him content. My visuals made an impact by showing emotion, instead of just providing a general idea. It kinda has some relevance to everyday life, and a fair amount of people can relate to it. I liked it a lot and I made it for its expression of music, which is something I am passionate about. My special effects provide a small layer of comedy, but for the most part, it was a serious and expressive piece of work, and the effects were supposed to make you feel how the musician felt. I would say I'm satisfied with my result, it turned out very well, but I could improve the B-Roll and I think I will work harder next time.
You had a very clear voice over.
ReplyDeleteSome shots were a little blurry, but you probably wanted it to be like that.
Really good all together!
It flowed very nicely.
ReplyDeleteA few of the shots were a bit dark.
The b-roll and music came together nicely.
I like your b-roll of you and your dad. You could of made the lighting better in some shots though. I really love your sequencing from one b-roll to another. I also love your background music. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI like the audio, it's really clear and easy to listen to.
ReplyDeleteI think the words on some of the scenes were slightly unnecessary.
The music flowed well with the poem itself.
I liked how your voiceover was clear and easy to understand. I think that you could've filmed the b-roll in better lighting and made the shot of the lyrics not blurry. I also liked how you used different angles to add interest.
ReplyDeleteYour use of transitions were nice. The last clip of all of the papers were out of focus. Your voiceover was very clear and I could understand it the whole way through the video.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the transitions between each shot.
ReplyDeleteSome shots were a bit dark to see.
I also liked how your footage related to what you were saying in your poem.
Great Job Rafael! The B-Roll was excellent, as well as the text layovers (*crash*).
ReplyDeleteOne of the B-Roll was blurry, I believe it was the B-Roll that seemingly had a bunch of papers on a surface.
The music gave a nice touch to the poem, it rocks!
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1.) I really enjoyed you poem! Great background music!
ReplyDelete2.) I think you could have edited a couple of clips because it was a little dark.
3.) Over-all, great job! I liked how you included the clip with your father and added the text-layover, "Like father like son"!
Good job with the special effects. It helped get my attention more.
ReplyDeleteI think if you made your narraters voice a tad louder it would have made it a little clearer.
I do like your acting with your voice and also in your b-roll.
I love the edits you use to cut to the next scene. amybe go somewhere brighter so the story appeals to us more. You had a great VO it was clear and easy to hear. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and it was said clearly. Some of your shots were blurry and could have been brightened. Your visuals showed nice emotion.
ReplyDeleteNice sequencing. A lot your b-roll should've been shot with better lighting because a lot of your b-roll was to dark to me. But overall great poem and I was able to follow your message.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and what you were saying, and the messege you put across. Some of your shots could've been lighter, and maybe next time you could say your poem with a little more emotion. Your text layovers were pretty good as well as your transistions.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the poem because I can relate to the poem because i really enjoy playing music and listening to it.
ReplyDeleteI think that the B-role could have been brighter on some of the shots in your home because they were hard to see
I liked hoe the B-role matched the poem.
Your poem definitely had some emotion
ReplyDeleteYou could of spoken with more expression
Everything else about it, the B-Roll and audio, was great. Overall, great poem.
'Ello, mate! Nice visual poem, I liked how you added role play lines in there (Role play forever!) it was kind of funny. One thing you can improve is to make that last scene a little clearer. And I think your background music matched your video.
ReplyDeleteThe background music really makes the voiceover stand out. The first two shots were a dark. The shot of him and his dad playing was framed really well.
ReplyDeleteHey Rafaelisasneakysneakysnake! Awesome name and great work on your visual poem! I really liked your B-Roll with guitar because it's impressive what you got and it really relates to your poem. I would suggest to input more emotion in your voice. It seemed you were speaking monotone I guess.
ReplyDeleteEither way, your poem was incredibly awesome! It took a different take from other poem I've seen thus far since it was written in 3rd person I believe. Keep up the great work Rafael!
Compliment: I really liked your Voice over volume and your music, they both match with your actual video and that's important.
ReplyDeleteImprovements: Maybe could've improved at the ending if that was your script, then maybe you can edit it out, but if it isn't and if it's apart of your actual Visual Poem, then maybe adjust the bluriness
Compliment: I really thought you did well on your Music, Voice Overs, and your Visuals, they were perfect.
Your poem was written very well. I noticed that while reading your voice-over, you could have a bit more expression in your voice, as you seemed to be reading in a monotone at some parts. The effects/transitions you used definitely applied and added to the overall product.
ReplyDeleteI really liked all of your b-roll and how you used different angles and light to create interest. I think that you could've focused some of the shots more. I liked how you said your poem with expression and spoke clearly.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and the message you were putting across. The voice over was clear, but next time try to put in a little more emotion. I liked the text layovers and the transitions.
ReplyDeleteI like seeing what you are saying. You said you're topic was rock music I was getting more of maybe just guitar music like maybe country? Riming was good-GREAT
ReplyDeleteI liked how both your music and your visuals matched your audio. There was one part where it might have looked like you ran out of b-roll so you just put it in. I learned that you can play guitar. Cool!
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